tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32475202.post2239353380519950959..comments2024-03-27T12:59:18.455+00:00Comments on from Pantperthog to Knockando: Family Ties (a short story)Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32475202.post-27872397526145387692010-04-26T00:19:36.962+01:002010-04-26T00:19:36.962+01:00But it's got a twist at the end. His dad is a ...But it's got a twist at the end. His dad is a zombie.<br /><br />Why does no one seem to get that?Jongudmundhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13355906920547912762noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32475202.post-7754468964629590412010-04-25T11:01:35.070+01:002010-04-25T11:01:35.070+01:00Like it! I mean, it's quite depressing in one ...Like it! I mean, it's quite depressing in one way, but on the other hand, it's heartening that the son cares enough to care for his dad in this way. I don't think it matters too much whether your reader identify and agree with the son or not... even if they identify with the daughter, at least it makes yours a believable story... it's when the reader doesn't have an opinion at all due to not really 'entering' into the story that you've really got to worry! <br />Particularly like: on a good day he doesn't sniff it. <br />great detail.<br />good 'show don't tell'!<br />could you lengthen this and try to send to a woman's magazine or suchlike... perhaps give it a bit of a twist at the end..?!annieporthousehttp://www.annieporthouse.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32475202.post-9978077237529439952010-04-14T16:52:08.334+01:002010-04-14T16:52:08.334+01:00Very moving story. It's tough facing these ki...Very moving story. It's tough facing these kinds of questions especially when you throw in a moral dilemma of the kind posed here. <br /><br />However, I can't empathise with the character's reactions. I would be in the sister's camp. <br /><br />If there was a memory or recollection of special moment demonstrating the loving relationship between carer and parent I could possibly see a motivation for taking on such a responsibility, it would work better than just being told that the character loved the person.<br /><br />Instead it just seems like life has become a succession of ironies the most basic being that the carer had never really cared about their Dad before and now finds themselves doing so in a very intimate fashion.<br /><br />It's one of those situations where the reader can't help but fill in the gaps with their own experience and the story possibly becomes different to each person because of that. What does that say about me!!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02019333337490035979noreply@blogger.com